2023中考英語作文：素質教育

04 素質教育篇（一）根據中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于50詞的文段寫作。文中已給出內容不計入總詞數。所給提示詞語僅供選用。請不要寫出你的校名和姓名。

假如你是李華，你們學校正在開展“安全月”宣傳活動，倡議大家制作關于安全教育的主題海報，你們班交換生Peter給你發郵件詢問相關事情。請用英語回復一封郵件，告訴他海報上交的時間，并分享你設計海報的一些想法。

提示詞語：design，safety rule，careful，protect，picture提示問題：When should you hand in the poster?What would you like to share with Peter about designing the poster?Dear Peter,I＇m glad to receive your email ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.Yours,Li Hua【寫作思路】這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給Peter寫一封郵件，告訴他關于制作關于安全教育的主題海報的相關事宜。由題目中給出的提示問題可知，短文中應包括以下內容：首先告訴Peter海報上交的時間；
然后和他分享一些設計海報的想法。第二個內容應該是短文的主體。題目中并沒有規定具體的寫作內容，學生們應聯系自己的實際生活，展開合理的想象，將這些內容補充完整后，用正確的英語表達出來，這是寫作中的一個難點。短文應以一般現在時為主、第一、二人稱來敘述。寫作時應注意：首先要合理安排短文內容，敘述應有層次、有條理。可以使用一些表示先后順序的詞或短語，如First, Second, Last but not least等等。題目中給出的提示詞應該在短文中用上。其次應注意文章的表達，英語句式的結構與漢語是不同的，因此不能根據漢語思維逐詞翻譯，應該從句式的整體考慮，先確定主干結構，然后添加修飾成分。為提升作文檔次，應注意使用一些高級詞匯、短語以及復合句、非謂語動詞等復雜結構。同時語句之間使用恰當的連接成分，使文意上下連貫，表達流暢。

【滿分范文】Dear Peter,I＇m glad to receive your email. As it is required，you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday.Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you. First and foremost，the basic safety rules are of great importance，which should be included in your poster. In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school. Last but by no means least，if I were you，I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness，considering that better safe than sorry. In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.Yours,Li Hua【名師點評】這是一篇優秀的作文，短文作者根據題目要求，給Peter寫郵件，告訴他制作主題海報的一些事情。短文有以下幾個優點：首先文章內容完整，結構清晰，符合題目要求。除題目中給出的開頭和結尾，短文主要包括兩個內容：第一段用一句話告訴Peter上交海報的時間；
文章的中心和重點是放在了第二段上，這一段中作者和Peter分享了一些制作海報的想法。主要從四個方面進行闡述，內容非常詳實，并使用了First and foremost, In the second place, Last but by no means least, In addition等短語，分清了這一段的層次，敘述非常有條理。其次短文中使用了正確的時態和人稱，語法規范，用詞準確，并使用了較復雜的句式結構，表現了作者較強的語言運用能力。短文中較好的句型有：Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.、In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school、In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.等。

（二）日前某校進行了題為“有壓力向誰說”的問卷調查（結果如圖），請你根據要求寫一篇英語短文參加該校的征文活動。

向老師傾訴向朋友傾訴 向家長傾訴 不跟任何人說內容包括：1. 簡要描述調查結果；

2. 你喜歡向誰傾訴壓力？為什么？3. 提出2條緩解壓力的建議。

要求：1. 文章必須包括所給要點，但不要逐條翻譯，可進行適當拓展；

2. 書寫規范，80—100詞，開頭已給出，不計入總詞數；

3. 文中不得出現真實校名、人名。

When teens have stress, they will talk about their stress to different people. Here are the results about our survey. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】When teens have stress, they will talk about their stress to different people. Here are the results about our survey. Thirty-five percent of students will talk about their stress to their teachers, forty percent of students will talk to their friends, only fifteen percent of students talk to their parents but only ten percent of students talk to nobody. For me, I like to tell my friends about the pressure, because we are all the same age, they sometimes feel the same as us .and we can communicate with and understand each other easily. But as a student, we should learn to relieve stress.First of all, we should properly face the pressure.?Stress is everywhere in our daily life, so we can＇t be afraid of them and try our best to deal with them. Secondly, we can listen to light music or do some proper sports, which can let us relax. Finally, believe in yourself. We should believe in ourselves. We can deal with any trouble with the help of ourselves or others.Stress is everywhere and we must face the pressure properly.【解析】1. 題干解讀：本篇文章屬于話題性＋圖表型作文，根據圖表內容說明不同的人對壓力的訴說對象不同的情況，文中會較多的使用數字說明，做一個對比，然后闡述自己的壓力喜歡對誰說以及原因，并且提出該如何緩解壓力的幾條建議。建議可以從自身實際出發，自己平時是如何緩解壓力的可以一起分享。

2. 例文點評：文章采取三段式，第一段對圖表內容進行闡述，以及闡述自己喜歡向誰訴說壓力和為什么？第二段主要給出一些緩解壓力的建議，第三段做一個總結，概括壓力無處不在，但是要正視壓力。文章結構完整。段落銜接很好，語言表達清晰準確，語句簡單易懂。

3. 高分亮點：
短語：talk about；
the same as；
communicate with；
deal with；
be afraid of。

句型：so引導的并列句；
because引導的原因狀語從句；

（三）習近平主席呼吁：“共同呵護好孩子的眼睛,讓他們擁有一個光明的未來”,為此,學校 廣播站邀請你寫一篇關于保護視力的倡議書,請根據以下信息寫一篇文章：
現狀 1. 越來越多的孩子帶上了眼鏡；
2. 超過 70%的初中生近視；
3. 父母和老師為此擔憂；

原因 1. 學習；
2. 電子產品；
3. 缺少睡眠；

建議 1. 每天至少做兩次眼保健操；

2. 多進行戶外運動；

3. 健康飲食；

……視力差：have poor eyesight要求：
1. 所寫內容必須包括以上表格提供的所有信息,并適當發揮；

2. 文章不少于 90 詞,開頭已給出,不計入總詞數；

3. 語意通順,意思連貫,條理清楚,書寫規范；

4. 文中不得出現真實的姓名、校名等信息。

Poor eyesight is a serious problem among the youth of our country. It’s amazing that the situation is going from bad to worse. It is time that we take the problem seriously. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Poor eyesight is a serious problem among the youth of our country. It’s amazing that the situation is going from bad to worse. It is time that we take the problem seriously.At present, more and more students wear glasses, over 70 % of the middle school students have poor eyesight. Both parents and teachers are worried about it. Here are some main causes. First, some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest. Second, some students even like to watch TV or use computers for a long time.Third, some students may not have enough sleep. In order to have good eyesight, we should do eye exercises at least twice a day. We can also try to do more sports in our spare time. We had better eat healthy food. Of course, it is important to have a good habit of using our eyes. For example, we shouldn’t read in the sun or in bed. I think all of us should understand the importance of protecting eyes and try our best to protect them.【解析】題干分析：這是一篇要求寫一篇關于保護視力的倡議書，響應習近平主席呼吁：“共同呵護好孩子的眼睛,讓他們擁有一個光明的未來”，觀察提示表格，寫作內容要包括目前的現在，還有產生這些問題的原因，已經提出的相關建議。

例文點評：這是一篇優秀的例文，很好的完成了試題規定的任務，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確的運用的時態，例文中運用的是一般現在時。例文第一段首先提出了目前我國青少年視力不良的社會問題；
第二段詳細的介紹了產生問題的三點原因；
第三段提出有效的建議，號召保護視力。例文還使用了一些亮點詞句，增強邏輯關系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。

高分亮點：
短語：At present目前；
more and more越來越多；
be worried about擔心；
too much太多；
like to do sth喜歡做某事；
In order to sth為了做某事；
at least至少；
try one’s best to do sth盡某人最大努力做某事；
eye exercises眼保健操；
in one’s spare time在某人空閑時間。

句型：（1）First, some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest. Sb. spend time (in) doing sth某人花費時間做某事；
（2）Of course, it is important to have a good habit of using our eyes. It is +adj. (for sb.) to do sth(對某人來說)做某事時怎樣的。

（四） 假如你是李華，你的表妹Lily面對即將到來的期末考試，壓力很大，這幾天甚至出現了失眠的狀況，請你給她寫一封電子郵件，幫助她盡快調整好狀態迎接考試。

提示詞：
relaxed；

music；

exercise；

believe in要求:1. 參考提示詞,可適當發揮2. 語句通順,意思連貫,書寫工整；

3. 文中不得出現任何真實信息(姓名、校名、地名等)4. 詞數：不少于70詞。(開頭和結尾已給出，但不計入總詞數。)Dear Lily, __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Hua【滿分范文】Dear Lily,I＇m sorry that I heard from you. I think proper pressure is normal, because exams are important for us. This happened to me. Let me tell you about my advice. You can do something you like to relax yourself. For example, I like to listen to music because some soft music can help us relax. I exercise regularly to increase my ability to work under pressure. We have to learn to believe in ourselves. If you think these suggestions is good for you ,you can have a try. I hope my suggestions can help you.Yours,Li Hua【解析】1.題干解讀：該題目屬于信件寫作，要求根據來信寫回信，信件內容應該完整地給出相關建議，幫助她盡快調整好狀態迎接考試。適當使用副詞和連詞等增加亮點。寫好時，再閱讀一遍，減少語法錯誤，不要犯單詞拼寫上的錯誤。

2.例文點評：這是一篇優秀的例文，完整地給出相關緩解考試壓力的建議，避免出現累贅。例文結構清晰，行文連貫，恰當地運用了副詞和連詞等用以過渡，增強了整篇文章的邏輯關系。

3.高分亮點：詞組：heard from；
proper pressure；
my advice；
relax yourself；
soft music；
exercise regularly；
believe in ourselves；
is good for等；

句型：
I think proper pressure is normal, because exams are important for us. /Let me tell you about my advice./For example, I like to listen to music because some soft music can help us relax. /If you think these suggestions is good for you ,you can have a try ./I hope my suggestions can help you.【點睛】書面表達：
首先認真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點；
然后根據提示內容，列出寫作要點及每個要點中可能要用到的表達，例如heard from；
proper pressure；
my advice；
relax yourself；
soft music；
exercise regularly；
believe in ourselves；
等；
然后緊扣要點，動筆寫作，在寫作過程中，要注意句與句、段與段之間的過渡，必要時可適當運用表示轉折、因果、并列、比較等關系的連詞，使文章過渡平穩，自然流暢，如however；
最后，要仔細檢查有無單詞拼寫錯誤、標點符號誤用等，還要檢查語法結構是否合理，有無重復、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，詞數是否符合要求等。

（五）今年3月5號學雷鋒紀念日，你校組織志愿者去夕陽紅敬老院開展“學雷鋒，送溫暖”活動。假如你是學生張華，請將活動情況介紹給你的美國筆友Ben，分享這次美好的經歷。

活動時間3月5日活動地點夕陽紅敬老院（Xiyanghong Nursing Home)參加人員學校志愿者活動內容1. 送鮮花和水果 2.幫助打掃衛生 3.……活動感想1.關愛和尊重老人2. ……..要求：
(1)表達清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

(2)必須包括表格中的所有信息，并按要求適當發揮；

(3)詞數：100左右（開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數）；

(4)不得使用真實姓名、校名和地名等。

Dear Ben,Thank you for your last email. Let me tell you what we did in our school on March 5.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________I＇d like to hear about volunteering work in your school.Best wishes,Zhang Hua【滿分范文】Dear Ben,Thank you for your last email. Let me tell you what we did in our school on March 5.As soon as we got to Xiyanghong Nursing Home, people there gave us a warm welcome. The elderly people were very excited to see us. We brought some flowers and fruits to them.Then, we cleaned the windows and swept the floor for them. After that, some of us took a walk with them, chatted with each other and some of us played chess with them. When it was time for us volunteers to leave, they were thankful for our kindness and they felt somewhat sad.I promise to myself that I will go to see them whenever I＇m free. We should care for the elderly people and respect them.I＇d like to hear about volunteering work in your school.Best wishes,Zhang Hua【解析】1.題干解讀：本文是一篇書信作文，你校組織志愿者去夕陽紅敬老院開展“學雷鋒，送溫暖”活動。假如你是學生張華，請將活動情況介紹給你的美國筆友Ben，分享這次美好的經歷。。首先要認真審題，根據提示內容，列出寫作要點及每個要點中可能要用到的表達；
然后緊扣要點，動筆寫作。

2.例文點評：本文時態為一般過去時態，人稱主要為第一人稱。文章緊扣題目要點，內容完整，表述準確，語言的表述符合語法的結構，造句符合英語的表達習慣。

3.高分亮點：
短語：as soon as ；

get to；
give sb. a warm welcome；
bring sth. to sb.；
take a walk with sb.；
be thankful for…句型：As soon as we got to Xiyanghong Nursing Home, people there gave us a warm welcome.；
When it was time for us volunteers to leave, they were thankful for our kindness and they felt somewhat sad.（六）寒假即將來臨，你一定有你的寒假計劃吧？你校英語俱樂部開展了以“My plan for the winter holiday”為主題的征文活動，請根據下面的思維導圖，寫一篇英語短文向英語俱樂部投稿。

寒假計劃學習1.功課（作業、復習）2.閱讀（類型、原因）興趣1.運動2.藝術其他1.旅游2.要求：1）表達清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2）必須包括…中所有要點內容，并適當發揮；

3）詞數：100 詞左右（開頭已給出，不計入總詞數）；

4）不得使用真實姓名、校名和地名等。

My plan for the winter holidayWinter holiday is coming. Here is my plan for the winter holiday. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】My plan for the winter holidayWinter holiday is coming. Here is my plan for the winter holiday. First, I’ll keep on doing some sports such as playing Ping-Pong and running. I think they are good for my health. Next, I hope to relax by reading some books and watching TV. What’s more, I must finish the exercises left by teachers, because I will go to see my grandparents with mom and dad. I miss them very much. So do they. Finally, I would like to travel somewhere interesting with my parents. Probably I’ll go to Hainan. I want to enjoy the beautiful beaches there.This is my plan for the winter holiday. I’m looking forward to my happy winter holiday!【解析】題干解讀：本題列出了詳細的思維導圖，可以根據這篇思維導圖來完成自己的文章，可以按照思維導圖的形式來分段，本文是寫自己的寒假計劃，所以時態注意要用將來時。

例文點評：本文按照自己的順序詳細地描述了自己的寒假計劃，過渡詞用的很好，并且時態也是根據作者所需作出了適當的變化，條理清晰，文筆流暢。

高分亮點：
短語：keep on；
good for；
What’s more；
would like to 句型：I miss them very much. So do they.Finally, I would like to travel somewhere interesting with my parents.（七）Write at least 60 words on the topic“Weekend or Not？“according to the information given．（閱讀以下內容，并以“這是湯姆的周末嗎？“為題寫一篇不少于 60 個詞的短文，標點符號不占格．）如今，很多孩子在父母的安排下沒有了自己的周末，如下圖中的 Tom，請分析圖中的這種現象并談談你的看法，以 Weekend or Not？為題寫一篇不少于 60 個詞的英語短文，向 Parents 雜志投稿，讓父母們通過閱讀你的文章能有所啟發．要求：
1．簡單描述“Tom“的周末狀態、提出你的具體想法并給出建議；

2．短文中不得出現“Tom“以外的人名或任何校名及其他相關信息，否則不予評分．____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Weekend or Not？Tom has to attend lots of classes at weekends． He has little time for his favorite sport﹣soccer． Still， his parents are pushing him to do more math exercises， which worries him a lot．（要點一，湯姆的周末）Nowadays， many students are under much pressure like Tom． Their parents believe it is necessary for them to make full use of the weekends and learn as much as possible（高分句型一）． As a result， some students are stressed out and therefore lose interest in learning anything．（高分句型二） What is worse，they may not be able to learn to manage their own life．（要點二，大多數孩子的周末） I do hope all the children can have the freedom to choose what they like to do and enjoy their weekends．（要點三，自己的觀點）（八）為抗擊新型冠狀病毒（NCP），此次寒假我們必須呆在家里，假如你是Alice，作為九年級1班的班長，請給你班的同學們寫一封信．建議他們不要煩躁，可以在家做一些放松的活動來保證身心健康，并針對如何在上網課期間，取得更大進步給予建議．寫作要點：
1． 不要焦慮，我們將盡快重返校園．2． 可以在家進行放松的活動：
（1）閱讀，聽音樂，下棋．（2）室內活動（如做眼保健操）．3． 針對如何在上網課期間，取得更大進步，給予同學們建議．寫作要求：
（1）不得使用真實的姓名和學校名．（2）可適當加入細節，使內容充實，行文連貫．（3）字跡工整、語言精練、表達準確、條理清晰．（4）至少80詞．Dear classmates，How is everything going?_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Best wishes!Yours，Alice【滿分范文】Dear classmates，How is everything going？ Don＇t worry． It＇s a special winter holiday because of NCP． Everyone must stay at home to prevent it．We will go back to school as soon as possible．（不要焦慮，我們將盡快重返校園）I think reading， listening to music or playing chess can make you relax if you feel depressed and bored． 【高分句型一】Spending some time doing indoor exercise is necessary， such as doing eye exercises．（在家進行放松的活動）In the special period， online teaching is carried out every day． You are supposed to be on time on weekdays． It is necessary for you to have a quiet learning environment．【高分句型二】Clean up any distraction on the table before class． During the class， write down the key points of the knowledge and the difficult parts that you don＇t understand． You can ask for advice through Wechat， QQ or other ways as soon as possible． While studying hard， don＇t forget to exercise． Stretching your body is also useful．（針對如何在上網課期間，取得更大進步，給予同學們建議）We believe winter will finally pass， and spring is sure to come． I＇m looking forward to seeing you soon．Best wishes!Yours，Alice（九）近日，某校開展了“志愿者日“的活動，鼓勵同學們利用周末走出校園，盡自己所能為所在的社區做一些力所能及的事情。并隨機給100名同學發放了調查問卷，下圖是調查問卷的統計結果。

go to old people homevisit sick children in the hospitalclean up the parks in the community 請你用兩段話寫一篇短文，第一段簡要說明圖表內容，第二段從圖表中選出符合你實際的一項，結合自己的經歷，談談你的志愿者日是如何度過的。

要求：1．詞數不少于80詞；

2．開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。

Recently, a survey was done among 100 students in a school about how students spent the Volunteer Day on weekends．_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Recently, a survey was done among 100 students in a school about how students spent the Volunteer Day on weekends． Here is the result． 25% of the students chose to help clean up the parks in the community． 30% of the students spent their weekends visiting sick children in the hospital． （高分句型一）Nearly half of the students went to old people’s home to visit the old people there．（簡要說明圖標內容）Last Sunday， I went to old people’s home with my friends Lucy and Sam． We cleaned the rooms for the old people and told them many interesting things in our school． They told us stories about the past and how things used to be． Lucy and I are both good at singing， so we sang for them． They were so happy and sang along with us． An old grandpa also taught us how to play kung fu．（高分句型二） Sam likes telling jokes and his jokes made the old people laugh happily． It was a really meaningful Sunday．（結合自己去敬老院的經歷）In a word， volunteering is really a great experience for us． We can get such a strong feeling of satisfaction from helping others．（總結與心得）（十）某校正在開展“走進新時代，爭當合格中學生“的演講比賽，請以“We act，we improve“為主題，寫一篇演講稿，談談中學生除了學習課本知識之外，還應該做些什么？ 演講稿應包括以下內容：
（1）學會自立，誠實友善，舉止文明；

（2）培養習慣，發展興趣，不斷創新；

（3）關心他人，和諧相處，懂得感恩；

（4）……要求：（1）要點齊全，并適當發揮；

（2）文中不得出現真實的姓名與校名；

（3）卷面整潔，書寫美觀，可適當加 2﹣3 分；

（4）詞數：90 詞左右．開頭部分已給出，不計入總詞數．Ladies and gentlemen，We have entered a new area．As students，__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Ladies and gentlemen，We have entered a new area． As students， it’s our duty to study hard． But to be a qualified middle school student， I think we have a lot of things to do．（點題）First， we should learn to be independent and honest． We’re supposed to be friendly to others and behave politely in public．【高分句型一】 Second， we should have good habits． Habits play an important role in our life． We’d better develop our interests and the ability to create． 【高分句型二】Third， we should care more about others and be thankful to all the people who have helped us． Value the time we spend with our family and friends in our daily life． Last but not least， I think we should exercise more to keep healthy．（應該做什么）In a word， the more we act， the better we will improve．（總結全文）（十一）中學生課后活動豐富多彩，你最喜歡的是什么，請選擇其中一項，根據以下提示，以“An after-school activity“為題，寫一篇 80 詞左右的短文，與同學們分享。

要點：1．你最喜歡的課后活動是什么，及課后活動的時間、地點；

2．談談其給你帶來的益處；

3．你的建議。

要求：1．內容必須包括所給要點，可適當發揮，增加細節，以使行文連貫。

2．語篇完整，語句通順，語法正確，書寫規范。

3．文中不能出現人名、校名或地名，否則不予評分。

An after-school activityThere are many after-school activities． I like ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】An after-school activityStudents in middle schools have many kinds of after﹣school activities．Maybe they do sports，go hiking，watch TV or surf on the Internet．Even some students put all their free time into studying the textbook knowledge．But my favorite after﹣school activity is collecting stamps．Let me tell you the reason．（我最喜歡的課外活動）First，I can learn a lot from the stamps．There are many Chinese cultures in the stamps【高分句型一】．When I collect them，I can learn more about my motherland【高分句型二】．Second，I can make more friends．Many students love collecting stamps．Because of the same hobbies and interests，we can talk and do the same things．Then we can be good friends．（帶來的益處）In a word，after-school activities can make us relax．You can take up a hobby that you like． Why not join in it？（建議）