英語作文MyDreamJob（II）

      繼續(xù)上周分享的主題，因?yàn)橛胁簧賰?yōu)秀習(xí)作值得我們細(xì)細(xì)品味。很多同學(xué)想，寫好考試作文很簡單呀，只要35-45個(gè)單詞，我干嘛要學(xué)寫那么長的作文呢？作為一名教師，真的不想將自己的課堂天天圍著考試轉(zhuǎn)。一節(jié)英語課，不僅僅是教必須教的內(nèi)容，希望有更多的時(shí)間讓學(xué)生說他們想說的，學(xué)會(huì)寫自己想表達(dá)的，循序漸進(jìn)，讓聽說讀寫融合到貼近現(xiàn)實(shí)生活的場景。老師就像是一個(gè)武林高手，化有形為無形，化復(fù)雜為簡單——準(zhǔn)備的一字一句都需要讓課堂氛圍變得輕松自然，像是日常談話一般；對(duì)各種問題的解釋也需要簡單易懂。學(xué)語言不能喪失語言的彈性和生命力，若是課堂上花一些時(shí)間指導(dǎo)學(xué)生們真正“使用”英語，他們將會(huì)有越來越多的學(xué)習(xí)主動(dòng)性，學(xué)到自己真正想學(xué)的東西。

My Dream Job—— Director

錦繡小學(xué)五3班 韓哲

Someone wants to be a teacher, someone wants to be a doctor, someone wants to be a dancer… And I want to be a director.

A director can teach actors, decorate the light and make a movie. Sometimes it is very difficult to make the movie, but you should try your best and make efforts.

My favourite kind of movies is comedy. It is very interesting and meaningful, such as a movie which is about Kulu masters. I know a lot about “never give up”.

And I want to be a director like Li An. As you know, I can take photos by camera, I can also take a photo in the studios, or in the location. My photos are very beautiful. When I travel around the world, I always keep the memories with my camera. I also can write nice articles, such as short stories or short dramas. I always enjoy it. I write a lot of poems, my Chinese teacher Li likes them.

From my perspective, to become an outstanding director, I have to study hard, and read a lot of books. The most important thing is that I am supposed to watch more movies. I know a lot about movies, such as montage parallele, shooting script, telephoto lens… Only on this way I can have a chance to become a director. And if possible, I’d like to go abroad to study more about that.

This is my dream. It is not an easy thing but I will try my best to make it come true.

教師點(diǎn)評(píng)：這就是一位在生活中酷愛攝影的小女孩，說起自己的理想，眼里閃著光芒，文章中透出的專業(yè)令我刮目相看，堅(jiān)定而又自信。如今小小的相機(jī)鏡頭后的女孩，可以想象某一天你坐在攝像機(jī)后指點(diǎn)“江山”的帥氣！Sharon一定是你忠實(shí)的影迷！

My Dream Job——Unicorn Hunter

錦繡小學(xué)五3班 安涵鈺

I want to be a unicorn hunter. Last year, I bought a toy unicorn. It looks like a little white horse with a bright sharp horn on its forehead. And it is considered to be one of the “Mythical Animals” in USA, like the dragon in China. American girls are crazy about him. And the “hunter” in unicorn hunter does not mean hunting animals. It means somebody who gets close to the unicorns and research something about them.

Unicorns live in deep forest so we must enter into the forest. Unicorns are afraid of big sounds. So you have to stay still for a long time. Then, if you are lucky enough, unicorns will come out. You can use a pair of special glasses to see through the bones and find out the secrets of its DNA. So we can copy them and save them from extermination. And I also want to find out the secrets of the unicorn’s horn. Because some movies showed that unicorns’ horns had magic powers. So I’m going to find out whether it is true or not. I’m so excited to make my dream come true when I grow up.

Dreams can’t be easy, but dreams can be achieved if you have enough courage and effort. Julius Fucik said, “Face up live with smiles no matter what happens.” So do I.

教師點(diǎn)評(píng)：初看，的確不清楚這個(gè)職業(yè)是做什么的，頓時(shí)感覺代溝的存在。新新人類的想法也促使老師們不斷地學(xué)習(xí)、不斷地與時(shí)俱進(jìn)。文中非常詳細(xì)地解釋了特殊職業(yè)的意義，尤其注重上下文的邏輯關(guān)系，最讓我欣慰的是，小作者真的將英語作為了表達(dá)的工具，寫自己所想，是件幸福的事！

My Dream Job--Football Player

錦繡小學(xué)五3班 陳皓元

Sometimes I want to be a traveller. Because I want to travel around the world. Sometimes I want to be a vet. Because I like to take care of animals. Sometimes I want to be a pilot. Because I want to fly an aeroplane. But today I will tell you my dream job is a football player.

When I was a child, I usually watched the football matches. And how to play football well? Practise more and more. I think if you want to play football well and become a football star, firstly you will have a strong body and have good skills. I think Messi is a football star in my mind. He is in Barcelona club. He can play football very well. My dream is one day I can take a photo with Messi. If I am a football player, I want to go to the Barcelona club. I want to attend a match twice a week.

In the future, if I can’t become a football player. I think I will be a strong, successful and open-minded man one day. That’s good.

教師點(diǎn)評(píng)：小作者在課堂上思維非常活躍，勇于表達(dá)，相信足球場上也會(huì)是一名勇猛的健將。文章開頭與眾不同，這正是有夢的年齡，好羨慕。第二段中心明確，我們常常擔(dān)憂這一代人心中偶像的形象，看來他的陽光與滿滿的正能量讓我們很放心。

My Dream Job—— Teacher

錦繡小學(xué)五3班 馬奕辰

Everyone has a dream job. My dream job is to be an English teacher.

Why do I want to be an English teacher? Because I like Sharon and the children, I also like my English class. I want to be a teacher like Sharon and make more friends with children.

As an English teacher, I want to teach the students English, help them express their ideas in English and communicate with them after class. I can point out the students’ mistake, help them correct it. And I can make friends with my students. In my class, I wish all the children like my lessons.

If I want to be an English teacher, I should study hard now, and try to be admitted to a good school in the future. I will try my best to realize my dream. This is my dream job, to be an English teacher. Come on, be the best whatever I am.

教師點(diǎn)評(píng)

隨著不斷地成長，會(huì)遇到不同的人或事，會(huì)有不同的夢想。很榮幸，能成為影響小作者尋找夢想的那個(gè)人，言語中流露著單純與美好。祝愿美夢成真！

My Dream Job——Teacher

錦繡小學(xué)五3班 何源彬

Somebody wants to be a pilot. Somebody wants to be a cook. Somebody wants to be an artist. But I want to be a teacher.

I think teachers are like gardeners. They are smart and great. They are kind to students. And they always answer our questions patiently.

Teachers can read, write, teach and so on. They teach students Chinese, math and English.You can see them at schools. They work in the teachers offices, gyms or classrooms.

I want to be a teacher because my mother is a teacher, too. She knows many things and always talks to me very kindly. And I want to teach students knowledge. I am good at speaking and learning. I have read many books. So I know some interesting things. And I can answer my students many questions. If I am a teacher, I will teach my students how to study, how to play and how to have a rest. If I am a teacher, I will play with my students. If I am a teacher, I will talk to my students patiently…

This is my dream job. And I need to be hardworking and kind. I will try my best to make the dream come true.

教師點(diǎn)評(píng)

小作者有較強(qiáng)的英語表達(dá)能力，比較關(guān)注上下文的銜接與邏輯關(guān)系，內(nèi)容層層遞進(jìn)，并能夠嘗試用排比句進(jìn)行表達(dá)，體現(xiàn)了語言的美感。所以，寫作就是鍛煉我們思考能力和形成不同思維的過程，堅(jiān)持必有成效。

夢想Dream

Any great dream starts from the minor action!

任何偉大的夢想都是從微不足道的行動(dòng)開始的！