全程班考研英語作文的批改范例二

　　The set of drawing above vividly depicts a flower is pleaced （拼寫錯誤）in different circumstance. In first picture the flower is pleaced （拼寫錯誤）in greenhouse which pretent （Protects）flower from streatening and storm. （sandstorm）In second picture the flower is removed exposing to driving rain, with the flower fade. （這里變成一句完整的話，and the flower fades.）　　To begin with, the purpose of two cartoon （復數形式）is that the flower in greenhouse cant afford （經受得住用withstand）storm. Secondly, The （不在句首，不用大寫）symbol meaning of pictures imply that young peple （拼寫錯誤）should undergo challegen （拼寫錯誤）, Thus （同樣，不需要大寫）we can sovle （拼寫錯誤）some problems which we will encounter. In nowdays china （這個語序很別扭，改成nowadays in China, 注意中國大寫首字母）, many families only have one children （這是復數形式，用單數，child）. Those children get more love than any generation formly （Formerly）. They are too spoild（拼寫錯誤） to deal with shmething （Problems）which they should do （Encounter）.　　Accordingly, It（不在句首，不用大寫） is vital for us experience （To experience）some challengens （拼寫錯誤）, now parents should give thire （拼寫錯誤）children more freedom to deal with trouble and problems, Thus they will be personality and ability,（這句話可以刪掉，直接寫后面的就很好）in this way they become winners in competitive world.

　　The set of drawing above vividly depicts a flower is pleaced （拼寫錯誤）in different circumstance. In first picture the flower is pleaced （拼寫錯誤）in greenhouse which pretent （Protects）flower from streatening and storm. （sandstorm）In second picture the flower is removed exposing to driving rain, with the flower fade. （這里變成一句完整的話，and the flower fades.）　　To begin with, the purpose of two cartoon （復數形式）is that the flower in greenhouse cant afford （經受得住用withstand）storm. Secondly, The （不在句首，不用大寫）symbol meaning of pictures imply that young peple （拼寫錯誤）should undergo challegen （拼寫錯誤）, Thus （同樣，不需要大寫）we can sovle （拼寫錯誤）some problems which we will encounter. In nowdays china （這個語序很別扭，改成nowadays in China, 注意中國大寫首字母）, many families only have one children （這是復數形式，用單數，child）. Those children get more love than any generation formly （Formerly）. They are too spoild（拼寫錯誤） to deal with shmething （Problems）which they should do （Encounter）.　　Accordingly, It（不在句首，不用大寫） is vital for us experience （To experience）some challengens （拼寫錯誤）, now parents should give thire （拼寫錯誤）children more freedom to deal with trouble and problems, Thus they will be personality and ability,（這句話可以刪掉，直接寫后面的就很好）in this way they become winners in competitive world.