2024屆高考英語二輪復習書面表達專項練習19 文學藝術話題指導
2024屆高考英語二輪復習書面表達復習專題19 文學藝術話題指導實例指導
1----Internet VS Literature
1. 調查時間、調查問題以及調查對象；2. 不同的意見所占的比例及其理由；
3. 你自己的看法。
要求:
1. 詞數120-150；
2. 不要逐字翻譯。
分析:
1. 本寫作任務要求我們寫一篇調查報告,并在報告的最后發表自己的看法。這類寫作任務在高考中是比較常見的。在完成這類寫作任務時,一定要注意首先仔細分析寫作任務給出的表格內容及寫作任務的要求,按照具體要求理清思路后再開始寫作。
2. 通過分析寫作任務給出的具體信息,我們可以了解到:這次調查的時間是"上周",即"last week"；而調查的問題是"網絡對文學的發展起到的影響是好的還是壞的",即"whether Internet has a good or bad influence on literature"；調查的對象是"你校高三年級的全體學生",即"all the 300 students in Senior 3 in your school"; 持"網絡會促進文學發展"觀點的有210人,即占總調查人數的70%,而持相反觀點的則占30%；持前一種觀點的學生們和后者都有他們自己的觀點。通過這樣對寫作任務給出的信息的整理分析,我們在寫作時就會有一個清晰的思路,而且不容易遺漏要點。通過對信息的總結,我們可以避免對照材料逐字翻譯的毛病,并使文章更加簡潔。
3. 在講明了調查的相關信息之后,一定不要遺漏"發表自己的看法"這一部分,如果只單純介紹調查報告的相關信息而不發表自己的看法,這篇文章就是不完整的,就不符合寫作任務的要求了。在發表自己的觀點時,你可以選擇支持前一種觀點,也可以選擇支持后一種觀點,也可以做一個總結,說兩種觀點都有一定的道理,應該發揚網絡的優點來促進文學的發展,并注意采取一定的措施來防止網絡可能對文這篇文章的條理較清晰,包含了調查的相關信息和自己的觀點,基本涵蓋了寫作任務要求包含的各個方面。語言也比較簡潔、清晰,成功地將寫作任務給出的材料信息進行總結并用自己的話表述出來了,并未對材料逐字翻譯,這些都是這篇文章的優點所在。但是這篇文章還是存在不妥的地方:1. 遺漏了部分信息。首先,寫作任務中要求文章包含調查對象,而在介紹調查對象時,文章遺漏了"高三年級"這部分信息,只是模糊地說明300名學生。再者,文章在給出支持或反對的理由的時候,并沒有涵蓋表格中給出的所有內容。
2. 發表自己的觀點的部分前后不統一,自相矛盾。前半句話說"In my opinion, the former opinion is right",說明作者支持第一種觀點,然而后半句卻講的是網絡有消極影響,這樣就造成了自己觀點的前后矛盾。
3. 結尾部分有點偏離主題,本寫作任務并未涉及到是否應該鼓勵人們去讀經典名著的問題。
成稿:
Last week, the English Learning Club in our school made a survey among all the 300 Senior 3 students in our school on "what influence the Internet has on literature". The results are as follows:
Students who believe that the Internet has a positive influence make up about 70% of all the students interviewed. In their opinion, the Internet allows common people to take part in the creation of literature, making literature-creating a more popular phenomenon. Moreover, the Internet makes it easy for a good work to be known to the public. However, the other students have a different opinion. They argue that the Internet provides only "fast food literature" and not all the works on the Internet are good reading materials.
In my opinion, they both are partly right. The Internet is a coin with two sides when it comes to literature. We should make use of the positive side to promote the development of literature and try to avoid the bad influence it may bring at the same time. It is we people who can decide what influence it may have on literature.
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實例指導2----art festival
你們學校在學期末舉辦了一次藝術節(art festival)。請按下列要點寫一篇120詞左右的文章:
①你們班要在星期五下午聚會以慶祝藝術節。
②先是音樂、舞蹈活動。
③接下來是各種比賽。
④5點鐘以后是最激動人心的節目——烹飪比賽。
⑤雖然藝術節結束了,但你們仍意猶未盡。
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寫作分析:
1. 本次寫作任務為根據提示寫一篇關于學校藝術節的記敘文。注意記敘文的六要素:時間、地點、人物、事件、原因、結果,英語里叫做when、where、who、what、why和how。并且還要注意文章所用的時態為過去時。
2. 提示給出了時間先后順序,"先是"、"接下來"、"5點鐘以后",注意合理安排文章順序和段落。可以用一些表示時間先后順序的詞:at first, first, then, afterwards, following that, meanwhile, several minutes later, later on, soon, finally, at last.
3. 本文給的提示點比較多,注意審清題,可以先列出內容提綱。
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初稿:
Our school held an art festival at the end of the term. On Friday afternoon, our class had a party to celebrate the festival.
First we had music and dance. My friend Mary sang a pop song. And some others gave us dances. All these made us very happy.
Then we had some competitions. The most exciting program is the cooking competition after 5 pm. Each group had to make some special dishes. At once students became cooks; they are very happy, though most of them cook by themselves for the first time. At seven o抍lock all dis hes were ready. "Oh, they taste delicious," we all said happily.
本文基本概括了提示要點,敘述清晰,前后順序安排合理。但也有一些不足:
1.??? 結尾缺少了最后一個提示要點中的"意猶未盡"。
2.??? 文中時態混亂。3. 文中多次使用同樣的修飾詞happy / happily,詞匯量顯得貧乏。
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成稿:
Our school held an art festival at the end of the term. On Friday afternoon, our class had a party to celebrate the festival.
First we had music and dancing. My friend Mary sang a pop song. Some others danced for us. We were all very happy.
Then we had one competition after another. Before we knew it, it was five o抍lock. The most exciting program began: the cooking competition. Each group had to make some special dishes. The students had turned into cohoks, though they couldn抰 tell salt from sugar the day before.
At last we
had to finish our party. When we said goodbye to each other, we had the same feeling in our hearts: We want to have more wonderful times at school.
本文覆蓋了題目要求的所有要點,結構完整,層次清晰。文章開頭總的介紹學校舉辦藝術節。接下來從第二段開始就具體敘述作者所在的班為慶祝藝術節而舉辦的一次聚會,以點代面,烘托整體。寫班里的聚會時,從低潮向高潮展開,先寫唱歌、舞蹈,再寫烹任比賽,使聚會達到高潮。最后,作者寫出同學們一致的心愿:學生在緊張的學習之余,需要生動活潑的娛樂活動。本文語言流暢自然,是篇中學生不可多得的好文章。
實例指導3----Keen on Films
寫作任務:
現在同學們越來越鐘情于外國動作大片,而對國產有關愛國教育的影片不感興趣,校報英語角專欄針對此現象向同學們征稿,請同學們談談對這一現象的看法及理由。征文詞數在140左右。
分析:
1. 本次寫作任務要求大家根據提示寫一篇議論文。議論文的目的主要是通過擺事實,講道理來論證自己的看法和主張。寫議論文的基本要素包括論點、論據和論證方法。議論文中論點是核心,全篇的文字都是圍繞論點展開的。
2. 針對本次的寫作任務,同學們首先要確定論點,就是你自己的觀點——選擇觀賞大片還是國內具有教育意義的影片。
3. 正文中我們要用論據來支持自己的觀點。論據有理論依據和事實依據。如你選擇國際大片,你可以找出你的理由(reasons)。比如說大片場面激動人心,情節曲折離奇,表演手段令人目不暇接；如你選擇愛國教育影片,是因為在和平年代要繼承先輩的遺志,發揚愛國主義精神,觀看影片能激勵我們更加刻苦地學習,建設自己的國家等。正文部分我們尤其要注意結構的條理性和文字的邏輯性。我們可以
1. 文章整體結構比較完整,開頭介紹了這一現象,并表達了個人并不認同這一現象。語句比較通順,語法上也無明顯錯誤,字數也符合要求。
2. 存在的問題有:第一,論證并不十分有力,只是說出個人看法,并沒有足夠的事例來支撐作者的觀點。第二,論證時條理還不夠清晰。加上一些必要的關聯詞就可以解決這個問題。第三,文字和語言的處理還可以更加豐富,使作文更加出彩。
成稿:
Patriotic films have greatly influenced several generations of our Chinese. Numerous people are inspired by the courage and wisdom of our revolutionists and soldiers. However, to some students those films are less attractive than the exciting Hollywood films, for there are no handsome actors or romantic love stories.
I cannot agree with those students on that. The reasons are as follows: Firstly, in comparison with foreign films, the Chinese patriotic films tell us the real touching and inspiring stories that happened in China years ago. From their stories, we know our happiness today owes to all their efforts and struggle. Secondly, a number of them are also great works, for example, Zhang Gathe Soldier Boy. We should get rid of the idea that patriotic films mean dull and boring.
In conclusion, I want to say, the outstanding patriotic films are also the record of the Chinese history. We students should not only watch them but also love them.
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Powerful sentences:
1. The patriotic films are also the great works of the senior Chinese film artists. We should show respect for them.
2. When we stress the meaning of the patriotic films, we don’t mean films full of instruction and education.
3. Patriotic films can be interesting, wonderful, and worthy of watching as well.
實例指導4---- What kind of music do you like best?
寫作任務:????一家英文報社在中學生中開展了"What kind of music do you like best?"的調查,請你給報社寫一封信談談你和你同學的觀點。開頭已為你寫好,不計入字數。(詞數:120左右)
Dear Editor,
All of our classmates are interested in your survey "What kind of music do you like best?"We had a heated discussion.
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寫作分析:
1. 這是一篇開放式作文,要確定文體、時態和寫作要點。要用恰當的詞語明確地表達自己和他人的觀點。
2. 表達觀點的文章屬于議論文。因此,這篇短文以一般現在時為主。
3. 確定寫作要點是本次寫作任務的難點。要先介紹你同學們的觀點,然后說說你自己的看法,最后做一個小結。
1、文章基本完成了寫作任務,表述了一些中學生在音樂方面喜好的信息及其原因。
2、但信息的描述有些模糊不清,主要是因為:缺乏恰當的過渡詞,文章顯得散亂,沒有層次。比如:在Some students like classical music.前缺少一個轉折連詞。
3、用詞重復,句式單一,缺少變化。比如:多次使用think表示看法。"They like / love music."是本文用來表達喜歡音樂的唯一句型。
成稿:
Dear Editor,
All of our classmates were interested in your survey "What kind of music do you like best?"
1. 本文結構嚴密,是典型的"三段式"結構:第一段引出文章內容；第二段詳細介紹同學們的觀點；第三段概括總結。層次清楚、連貫,清楚地說出了當代中學生對音樂的想法。
2. 運用了恰當的過渡詞和過渡句,段落之間、層次之間銜接自然流暢。如:however / personally speaking等。
3. 作者所用詞匯和句型較豐富。例如:在表達觀點時,用了不同的句式:They think ... / They say ...等等。
Powerful Patterns:
(表述自己或別人的觀點)I think ...I believe ...I hold the view that ...I’m sure ...In my opinion, ...Personally speaking, ...Some people think / believe / hold that ...
實例指導5---- 談音樂教育寫作任務: ????假如校報記者對你進行采訪,想讓你談談音樂教育對中學生學習、生活的影響。內容應包括以下幾點:
1. 學校有必要開展音樂教育。
2. 音樂教育不但能豐富知識,還可以調節學習節奏和緩解精神壓力。3. 音樂能夠促進個人修養、增長技能、促進智力發展。
4. 一項新研究表明,音樂學習有助于促進兒童的記憶力發展。
5. 音樂藝術使人更具創造力。詞數120左右。
分析:
1. 本寫作任務要求同學們根據相關提示發表自己的看法。在動筆之前,首先應明確文章的主題,即你應該圍繞哪一論點展開論述。從所給提示信息中同學們不難提煉出中心論點,即:學校有必要開設音樂課。隨后,同學們要考慮的就是如何圍繞中心論點將寫作任務中提供的信息有效地組織起來。
2. 根據以上分析,本文可分成以下三部分:第一部分首先總述自己的觀點,即文章的中心論點。注意用語的簡明扼要；第二部分利用所提示的論據來充分闡述音樂教育對中學生學習、生活所產生的影響(即內容要點中的第二至五條),同學們可以充分利用這些論據,將其表述清晰,并適當添加連接成分,使其通順連貫；第三部分做一個簡短的總結,呼應文章的主題。
3. 寫作過程中要注意用語的選擇,這是一篇采訪稿,在接受采訪中,可以使用:I think ..., I believe ...等來表述觀點和看法。其次,在論述過程中運用一些連接成分,如not only ... but also ... 等,這樣可以將論據有機地結合起來。最后,在總結觀點的時候,可以采用:in a word, to sum up等詞組。而在引用研究結果作為論點時,可采用以下句式:a study / report shows that ...
初稿:
I think we should offer music lessons. People who don’t know music are lacking in knowledge because music is an important part of it.
Music not only helps us gain knowledge, but it can regulate our learning pace and relax the pressure of spirit. Music can help to cultivate students’ personality. At the same time our skills and mental development can be greatly promoted. According to a new study, learning music can help develop the children’s general memory skills. The art of music is very important to our creativity and it can save a nation’s culture.
In my opinion, music lessons should be offered in middle schools because music plays an important part in our daily lives. Firstly, music education not only enriches our knowledge, but also regulates our learning pace and reduces our pressure. Secondly, music education helps to cultivate our minds by equipping us with more skills, which can promote our intellectual development. For example, a new study shows that learning music can help improve children’s general memory skills. Finally, learning music also helps develop our creativity.
In short, I think music is very important for us and it can make our lives more colorful and interesting. As a matter of fact, most middle school students enjoy music very much.
Powerful sentences:
1. Music plays an important part in our daily lives.
